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Sharron Bassano's avatar

A powerful opening to a longer narrative. This is full of menace, a perfect set up for what promises to be a very difficult story. OR, in my opinion, it could stand alone, as is, as micro-fiction — you have clear characters, clear setting, an obvious back story, a conflict, an open end. You could allow the reader to fill in the blanks. Either way, excellent, CJ!

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beth Kane's avatar

This gives me chills and makes me nauseous. Very powerful for such a brief piece

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